Your English Homework this week
You are to up- level and improve these sentences. Think about the different ways you can improve them.
Adjectives, punctuation, WOW words and using a different sentence openers.
Re write these sentences below, make sure they make sense.
1.) Jenny watched the old lady as she came closer.
2.) I ran back along my street.
3.) The army stood on the hill.
4.) A storm moved over the forest.
5.) Tim climbed up the wall.
1. On a bright sunny day a beautiful girl named Jenny suspicuslly wacthed an old lady struggling to walk past
ReplyDelete2. I popped out of Asda and raced my sister named Katie all the way to our comfy home.
3. The red army marched off a gigantic hill that was so close to the sun
4. Suddenly while a lion was eating a zebra a flashing storm electrecuted the lion and put the forest on fire
5. A cheeky boy named Tim got a ladder the hight of the red bricked wall and he fell on the way down.
1) One bright morning a girl named Jenny was suspiciously watching an old , wrinkly lady as she was approaching.
ReplyDelete2) One day I was so scared that I rushed back through my street.
3) One day I was jogging up a hill when I saw the army standing straight upon the hill.
4) One day it was dark and dim and a dark and black misty storm travelled over the bright green forest.
5)One day a boy called Tim called his friends over and while they played IT he climbed over a steep poka- dotted wall.
1) One bright,sunny morning a girl named Jenny was spying on an old,wrinkly lady as she was coming nearer as the sun went by.
ReplyDelete2) Suddenly as I walked passed my house I heard weird sounds across the street so I ran back in to my house.
3) While I was approaching the high hill like a mountain I saw a line of a strict army on the hill.
4) One cold, dark and creepy afternoon I ran to the forest nobody was there.Suddenly a lighting stuck out across the forest.
5) Tim was at the fun, playful park until he found a small rock climbing wall so he climbed up using all he strength to get up finally he reached the top of the wall.
1.One sunny morning a girl called Jenny,wached a old , wrinkly lady come closser and closer toyards her.
ReplyDelete2.One day I was so scared so I ran as though I was beeing chased down my street.
3.The big , powerful army stood among the massive , green hill.
4.One gray day , a massive storm clibed over the forest like a gray blanket.
5.One day a naughty boy called Tim clibed a wall as big as a giant.
1. Jenny watched the old lady suspiciously as she approached.
ReplyDelete2. I raced along my clean, beautiful street on a bright, sunny morning.
3. The tough army stood straight on the tall colossal hill.
4. A mighty, huge storm stirred to the green forest.
5.Tim climbed up the lofty brick wall with had fire drawn on.
1) Jenny peeped out of the window and saw a creepy looking old women comming closer and closer.
ReplyDelete2) i thougt i had seena gost go i ran out of my street.
3) One day I went out to take my dog for a walk and i saw an army standing upon the huge hill
4) A lion about to eat his pray and suddenly POW!!! a huge storm apperd from nowhere
5)Tim invited his frends over for tea and until they came he was climing a huge wall.
Boring:Jenny watched the old lady as she came closer.
ReplyDelete1)One bright sunny day after approaching from school Jenny was worryingly looking at the old,scary and wrinkly lady while she was slowly coming closer and closer.
Boring:I ran back along my street.
2) I quickly ran as fast as a cheetah, but I couldn't do it. They were too fast, but I can't give up. So, I took my own secret and safe route to my lovely home.
Boring:A storm moved over the forest.
3) On a lovely sunny day me and Shreya were playing at the lovely,beautiful and jolly park but suddenly a horrible storm came it was as frightening as a angry monster.
Boring:Tim climbed up the wall.
5)One day Max and Tim were playing and the challenging Tim said "Come on lets climb the strait and lovely designed wall."So they did and unfortunately he broke his knee.
1) One radiant morning an energetic,young girl called Jenny gazed admiringly at a beautiful,fragile old lady as she strolled by.
ReplyDelete2) On a scorching hot summer afternoon i raced through pedestrians to meet my adorable,babbling baby sister.
3) The courageous,strong army wearing vibrant green jackets marched up the colossal hill.
4) One frightful evening i took refuge under a ginormous oak tree as a horrifying storm loomed over the dark forest.
5) A mischeavious little boy called Tim staggered up the enormous,colorful wall as he escaped from the sly fox.
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1. one sunny morning jenny watched the old lady as she came closer.
ReplyDelete2. i ran back along the mysterious and sombre street.
3. the scary army stood on the magnificent hill
4. An enormous and gigantic storm moved over the rich forest
5. Tim climbed up the abnormal wall.
1) One morning Jenny peeked of the window and watched the slow old lady as she came closer.
ReplyDelete2) On a cold winter day I ran along my street to my cozy house
3) The brave army stood on steepy hill to save the country
4) As the night progressed the thundering storm moved into the dense dark forest
5) Tom carefully climbed the steep wall
jenny saw a suspiciously old lady as she was approaching
ReplyDeleteit was a stormy day i ran quickly then i was tiered i saw a golden cycle and i ran quickly to my warm
fluffy bed
the seven army stand on the dangerous hill
a big storm appeared and all the leaves shivered and the tree fall over a person
Tim climbed on the sticky wall
1)One cold day Jenny watched a sad and shivering old lady struggling to walk .
ReplyDelete2)One scary dark night when I was walking on the street,I was frightened and ran back to my safe home.
3)The brave and strong army stood in the hill and guarded our country.
4)A dangerous storm hit our town and there was power shut down for one whole day.The next day the storm subsided and moved towards the forest.
5)Thin and week Tim climbed a tall wall and fell down and broke his tibia bone.
1 One gloomy day an 8 year old girl called Jenny seared at the old lady and she crept close.
ReplyDelete2 I quickly ran backwards towards my house along my street
3 the strong army stood with there iron gear ready for battle
4 a ginormous storm attact the forest as it came closer
5 tim jumped up the big wall
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1. One sunny hot day Jenny was spying on an old wrinkly lady as she crept over.
ReplyDelete2. I excitedly dashed back down my long winding street.
3. The tall and strong army stood to attention at the top of the steep grassy hill.
4. A really rough storm raged over the dark gloomy forest.
5. Strong tall Tim ascended the rock hard wall.
1. On a hot sunny day jenny watched a argly lady.
ReplyDelete2. As I ran to my house my mum was so far away so I ran towards her.
3. As the army was shoting Thayer were standing on the hill.
4. One day a storm was so harvey that it went in to the goriest.
5. A nughty boy called Tim got a ladder and claimed up the wall